What’s My Fault
Hollow faith caress bruised esteem,
scars hidden underneath the seam,
night reverberate silent screams,
aborted dreams, aborted dreams
fractured by lustful invasion,
modesty lies among treason,
Why victims are pinned as reason?
unfold questions, unfold questions.
drenched in shame, locked in guilty vault,
she gulps down his ruthless assault,
striving for answers, ‘What’s my fault?’
When life will halt, when life will halt?
** Whether its molestation, rape or any other sexual assault – Why is it that our society victimizes the victim? Why do the victims have to live in shame and suffer the ridicule?
Form: Monotetra
The monotetra is a new poetic form developed by Michael Walker. Each stanza contains four lines in monorhyme. Each line is in tetrameter (four metrical feet) for a total of eight syllables. What makes the monotetra so powerful as a poetic form,is that the last line contains two metrical feet, repeated. It can have as few as one or two stanzas, or as many as desired.
Powerful poem in an interesting form. The subject matter is a tad harrowing but hey, so is life.
great writing
lovely piece.
Thanks for sharing!
Very interesting format-it does lend itself to such a powerful topic! I think you do a great job of reaching the emotions in this topic.
This is writing with a mastery of phrases, loved it so much!! Thanks for linking with potluck!!
http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/09/poetry-potluck-bedazzled.html
our poetry potluck is open, if you have poems (old or new) to share, link in NOW,
you can link up to 3 poems, the more you share, the happier we are.
Thanks for the participation!
Happy Monday!
Beautiful poem exposing harmful mistreatment of victims of such terrible crime. Thank you for introducing the monotetra form of poetry. It is a very effective and musical way of emphasis.
Powerful piece, and thank you for the intro to monotetra. Well done!
beautiful expressions,
be responsible is cool.
Loved it. So aptly expressed. And true, Lakshmi. You really are the master of expression when it comes to poetry. 🙂
The problem is probably everywhere but it's just that our society likes to put the blame on the girl.. many a time, the girl is victimised if she is an outgoing person, with a modern outlook. Don't girls have the right to be happy as they are?
Instead of sympathizing with victims, such girls are in fact put through more turmoil, while in actuality, they need more love and empathy to come out of the trauma.
I wish more could be said about sensitive issues like these.
Regds, Punam
This was so cool I had to give it a try. I am still working on a Etheree, but not coming up with anything I like. Rajlakshmi thanks so much for putting these different style out there and explaining them I am learning so much from you!
I'm in love with you for writing this.
uffff kyaa mastt likhi princess 😀
emotions perfectly expressed…
n m glad you finally picked up this form 🙂
Rock On lady!!!