Souvenir
Tears
Aching
Broken heart
Crushed hope smashed dreams,
The sad souvenir of falling in love.
**A tetractys is a complete thought written in 20 syllables.
1st line 1 syllable
2nd line 2
3rd line 3
4th line 4
5th line 10
Image: Google
Beautiful! Like to try this poetry form 🙂
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No, Lakshmi, a broken heart never mends.. the scars remain.. as you rightly said, the souvenirs remain always.
That hit a sore spot. 🙂 ~Punam
Brilliant! Brilliant! Few words.. but a world unfolded!
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I really loved your 20 syllable poem, Rajlakshmi. I am now inspired to give it a try.
Thanks so much for sharing.
this really was sad raj. very touching.
A great little poem and an education too (:
That pic did it for me…tied the poem to a beautiful place
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Loved this one as well it is now easy getting thought in to syllables this confined, I will keep trying. BTW loved the last line on this one!
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its the worst souvenir, but not a regular one, thankfully! 🙂 nice new form for me to try! 😀 thanks Raji..!
Rally Week 29, My Poem
Short but deep.
I love how a short poem that could last long like this.
Thumbs up.
And thanks for sharing a bit about Tetractys. ^^
Happy rally.
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wonderful
man that is way too deep… I would love to be able to write like that… all I can do is the variety that I do…
this is brilliant!
Impressive. Love and Light, Sender
nice and interesting.
Masttttttt 😀 jus tin some words you covered everything :O
BUt i am still stuck @ how to count the syllables 😛
I am always so happy to find a new poetry form. And this one, practiced so eloquently with the perfect image accompaniment. Lovely.
THANK YOU (and thank you for your comment on my Rally poem as well.)
my heart just slightly wimpered..
first time here..
Lovely peom..
You taught me a new form of peom.. Thanks a lot..
Rhyming Waters
–Someone Is Special–
This form is new to me…very clever.
Wonderful; so much powerful imagery squeezed into this entry.
I'd never heard of a tetractys before but I'll definitely be giving it a try myself!
Kiera 🙂
Never seen this form before — I like it. I like your poem, too. Nice job.
Wow, so true.
Very very nice because it expresses so much in so few lines 🙂
sweet,
even
hypnotic
post more like this
and i'll be coming back very often 🙂
Love the form…I MUST try that.
Absolutely well said:-)
hey, i like this idea.
nicely done too.
i'll have a go at some point
I love learning about new poetic forms. Can't wait to try it. Thank you.
Victoria
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its worst souvenir !!!
ok.. i m taking this poem too seriously..
very good.. and like they say..
"short and sweet"
sad as it is the best form of poem u have made…deeply expressed like a short sharp shock… Cheers!!!
That is fantastic. I have never tried a poem like that so I really appreciate that you listed the type with the rules. Your poem is a gift with the rules being a bonus gift. Thank you!
love your entry,
'love your supportive matter more..
your technique writing on this kind of poetry is unbeatable!
wow,
elegant piece.
love the way you kill it.