The siren of police cars still echoed in my ears. A deep
brown stain was visible on the floor, where she had breathed her last, in a
pool of blood.
brown stain was visible on the floor, where she had breathed her last, in a
pool of blood.
Afar, I saw him grieving.
These memories might haunt me. How I wished he hadn’t betrayed my love.
And now revenge was awaiting him too.
Update – my friends were totally confused with my story… Blame my dodgy writing style 🙂 I hope it makes sense … thanks megz
A trigger happy lovelorn guy!!
Good one for the prompt, Raj 🙂
thank you Shilpa 🙂
Crisp enough 🙂 A nice theme, and crisply executed ! Good one, Rajlakshmi 🙂
glad you found it so… took me a while to write it more clearly… thank you 🙂
Very well written and crisp in 55 words. It's sad, though:)
yup sad… and sinister… thank you 🙂
Nice 55F Princess! I got it the first time… I thought it is Bollywood-ish 🙂
chalo thank god for that.. before the update was done 😀 thank you so much 🙂
This was a brilliant piece of writing. WOW, well done!
awww you are always sweet Kathy… thank you so much
Got the story the first time – someone found her partner with another woman, killed the woman who's now bleeding on the floor, dead. The police are coming and the protagonist says revenge is awaiting her partner too. Is she going to tell the police he killed the other woman, frame him? That would be perfect revenge on him:-)
I liked your interpretation of the story too 🙂 very filmy .. thank you so much for visiting
this can be converted into a full fledged story. a spurned lover and revenge are the right ingredients.
hehehe I suppose so 😀 poora bollywood masala movie 😛 Thanks
Ohh this is something ever spurned lover wants to do! might not be right though 🙂
yup revenge is never good. Thank you so much 🙂
naa naa!! now its lucid enuff 😛 😛
too lucid I think 🙂
Oh? Did I miss something?
well I updated the story.. hope it makes sense now 🙂
Meghu… For some reason protagonist is taking revenge on the couple. Uff my story writing…. Epic fail
ehhh kuch bhi nai samjha!!! :S